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Lynn: "Hey, Lincoln! You're coming to my softball game today, right?"

Lincoln: "Actually I've got some important business to attend to. Like Ace Savvy VS the Card Shark."

Lynn: "Lame. My team has won our last six games, and you're the only member of this family who hasn't come out to support me."

Lincoln: "Sorry, Lynn. I just can't do it today."

Lynn: [holding her bat threateningly] "Sure you won't reconsider?”

Lincoln: “I know you’re using that as an incentive. Do you have the guts to actually do that to your own brother?”

Lynn [nervously]: “Y-Yes! Yes I would! If you don’t come to my game, I’m gonna hit you!”

Lincoln: “Then do it. I’m not going, so let’s get this over with! Do it! Bring it on!”

(Lynn hesitates for several seconds.)

Lynn: “Dang it!” (She throws her bat across the hall.)

WHACK!

Lola (offscreen): “OW MY FACE!!!!”

Lincoln: “You can’t always get what you want, sis.”

Lynn: (sigh) “You’re right.”

(Luna saw the whole thing.)

Luna: “I’m so proud of you, bro.”

[FFWD >> HISHE Video]

Lynn: "Stay back! You're bad luck!"

Lincoln: "What are you talking about?"

Lynn: "My team has been dominating all season, then the one time you show up, we lose!"

Lincoln: “That’s because you threatened me with your bat to come! You practically forced me against my will.”

Lynn (off-guard): “…Well…I uh…I don’t remember doing that.”

Lincoln: “This is the only time that you lost, and your first response is to blame others, especially to your own family members.”

(Lynn was stunned)

Lincoln: “Quit being a sore loser and take it like a pro. Isn’t that what you always tell me whenever I lose to you?”

(Lynn then realizes…he was right.)


Lynn: (sigh) “What am I doing? I was so mad at my loss that I was blinded by my own pride. Boy am I stupid.”

Lincoln: “You’re not stupid. (places his hand on her shoulder) I’m sorry that you lost your game.”

Lynn: “I’m sorry too, little bro. Can you ever forgive me for the uh…bat?”

Lincoln: “Of course. It’s all in the past. I hope you do well next game.”

Lynn: “Thanks. You’re the best.”

(Lynn and Lincoln reconcile with a hug.)

[FFWD >> HISHE Video]

Lincoln: (on megaphone) "CONTRARY TO POPULAR BELIEF, I AM NOT BAD LUCK. I JUST LET YOU GUYS BELIEVE THAT SO I COULD GET OUT OF GOING TO YOUR STUFF. IT WAS A REALLY SELFISH THING TO DO. WE ALL NEED TO SUPPORT EACH OTHER. AND…

(He sees that the Loud Family is looking out the window. He throws megaphone away.)

Lincoln: “I’m sorry guys! I’m really sorry! This all started when Lynn told me that I was bad luck, even though she threaten me to come.”

(The Loud Family glares at Lynn. Lynn sheepishly and slowly ducks down.)


Lincoln: “I took advantage of it and it was wrong for me to do that! I know! Please let me back inside! It’s cold, I’m starting to get sick, and I…(sniff)-I’m sorry!”

Rita: “Oh my poor baby! What have we done?! Dear, I’ll bring him inside! Kids, Come on down and get some medicine, blankets, and a pillow, stat!”

Kids: “Ok!”

(Rita and the kids run to get Lincoln and bring him inside.)

Lynn Sr: “Jr!”

Lynn: “Yes dad?”

Lynn Sr: “When we’re done taking care of Lincoln, you and I are gonna have a LONG talk about luck.”

Lynn: “Dang it.”

[FFWD >> HISHE Video]

Family: "CONGRATULATIONS! YOU ROCKED IT, LYNN-SANITY!"

[Lincoln in disguise joins them]

Lola: [to the mascot] "Um, do you mind, fur ball? This is a family moment."

Lincoln: "Guys, it's me!" [takes the mask off] "I was here the whole time! This proves it. I'm not bad luck."

Lynn: 'Oh my gosh, you're right. Wow, Lincoln, I’m…I’m really sorry about yesterday. I guess my pride got the better of me…again.”

Rita: “We’re sorry for locking you out, sweetie.”

Lynn Sr: “If there is anything we can do to make up for it, tell us.”

Lincoln: “Hmm…you know there is one thing I have in mind.”

[cuts to the beach, Lincoln is sun-bathing with his family.]

Lincoln: “Ah, now this is the life.”

Lynn: “Here’s the vanilla ice cream you requested.”

Lincoln: “With rainbow sprinkles?”

Lynn: “Yep.”

(she hands him the ice cream)

Lynn: “Anything else?”

Lincoln: “Actually yes. You can relax with us.”

Lynn: “Really?”

Lincoln: “Yeah, just because you’re doing these favors for me, doesn’t mean you don’t take a break from it. Come on over.”

Lynn: “Wow…Thanks, man!” (she lays down on her beach towel and sun-bathes)

Lincoln: “Luna, a little Surfin USA?”

Luna: “You got it, bro.” (She plays her acoustic guitar.)

Lana: “Hey guys! Look what I caught!”

(she runs towards the family with a bucket full of jellyfish, but trips, sending the jellyfish flying towards them.)

Lincoln: (slow-motion) “NOOOOO!!!”

(The jellyfish lands on top of Lincoln and his family, electrocuting them.)

Family: “LANA!!!”

Lana: “Uh…Whoops.” (dashes away)

THE END
No deaths. No murders. No suicides. No psychological bullcrap. Just plain humor and nothing more.

The Loud House (c) Nickelodeon
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:iconmariostrikermurphy:
MarioStrikerMurphy Featured By Owner 18 hours ago  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Much better this version. Congratulations, dude!
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PLCTheCd Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2017  Hobbyist Writer
Much, much better
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Montyclan Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2017
Your ending was so much better than the actual episode.
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catface20 Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2017
This is Better,Do You Wanna Chat about My Upcoming Story Cheer Up Lincoln?
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JamesTheBrony92 Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2017  Professional Artist
Thank freaking god you made it happen.. This is exactly what I was looking because THAT episode had lots of problems I wish that have happened.. BBUUTT NNNNOOOO.. The writer was just like.. 'DDDUUUHHH I'm going to make the worst episode ever' Even Comic Book Guy would agree with you and you know what.. So will I. 
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iann28 Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2017
What about my alternate ending?

iann28.deviantart.com/art/No-s…
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AlexisSerna117 Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2017  Hobbyist Artist
I love endings like this
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misteroverlord Featured By Owner May 10, 2017
Yup.

This is wwwwaaayyy better than the ones you get were they did this on purpose to 'teach him a lesson about supporting the family'.

Yeah you need to support each other, but in a family that big you can't go to everyones events all the time. You need a little 'me' time.
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AstonLevy Featured By Owner May 2, 2017   Filmographer
Do more of these. You're rather good at them.
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MikeTheHuman113 Featured By Owner May 1, 2017
This was freaking amazing....
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Extricorez Featured By Owner May 1, 2017
This is satisfying, especially the part there Lincoln feeling sick, good job
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JoJoStardust Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2017  Hobbyist Artist
More satisfying than the actual episode.
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TailsandSpike4EX Featured By Owner May 31, 2017  Student Traditional Artist
Indubitably.
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:iconsuperdimentio77:
Finally, a No Such Luck Ficlet that doesn't go on a long drama. I mean, some are interesting, but it's good to see one that is just for fun. Also likes how Lynn is forgiven at the end. No tears, just being nice. Cute !
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yellowpikmin88 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2017  Hobbyist Writer
I love it. I can just picture the final frame like a scene from spongebob XD
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DaJoestanator Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2017  Hobbyist Writer
Out of all the alternate endings... this one actually comes the closest to hitting home: it actually LEGITLY feels like it could've (And kinda SHOULD'VE) been in the episode.... I'm not gonna lose my shit over it but... it was still a bit of a stinker. Still, excellent job at emulating the show style and giving us a more realistic ending. Keep up the good work :)
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PredalienMaster Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
This is the best alt. Ending/rewritted episode of no such luck. Really, i hate that since that episode wveryone exagerate -_-
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SMDKFan Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2017
cool.
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BloodKirbyUnleashed Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
Ok now this is more like it.
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Epic-wrecker Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2017  Hobbyist Writer
That's comedy. Good job. 10/10
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